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Em Birch's avatar

that turns to air line really lingered with me, such a gentle kind of release, but it feels completely final.

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

i love that you felt the finality in it 🤍 it means a lot that it stayed with you 🙏🏻

Em Birch's avatar

ahhh 🤍 i’m really glad it stayed with you… that kind of ending is exactly what i hoped would land 🙏🏻

Ethereal Twilight Poetry's avatar

Gorgeous poem ❤️😍 need to read more of your work!

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

thank you 🤍 that really means a lot ✨

Divyanshu Goyal's avatar

There’s something this poem does quietly it doesn’t describe release. It enacts it. Line by line, what was held starts thinning. What once burned without a name becomes night. Not resolution. Not healing. Just… air.

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

thank you for seeing it this way 🙏🏻 you described it more clearly than i ever could 🤍

syntaxevasion's avatar

The pain was not deep

was held in front

surrounded and driven

no tears would appear

not deep enough was water

the cold drew the direction

it had to be just one

one chosen not frozen

despair by velocity

faster than the pain could land

but it would not extinguish

not fast enough

there were words still unsaid

promises fading

the night was not dark enough

to stop a racing heart

the last beats at the brink

but he had not come

still breathing and writing

last words he breathed

released by the voice

one tone only

his

he fell into deep night

it was not sleep

it was arriving

he had said what he wanted to say

now he could have taken him

he wasn't even thinking about

the final night

and something finalized

and never woke up

something fell off

the night was now darker

yet clearer and broader

colder but faster warming

older but that day never came

alive but slow

from the very depth

a quicker light awoke him though

🙏🌈

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

🧡🧡🧡🧡

Farid Alsafaar's avatar

So Beautiful Diana

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

Thank you 🤍🙏🏻🕊️🌔

Farid Alsafaar's avatar

The sense of unfinished business Itself is Always Seen..and the unfolding to nowhere continues 🙏🤍🕉🥰

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

thank you for your comment 🙏🏻 i’m glad it resonated with you 🤍

Diana Shah ✦'s avatar

thank you for this 🙏🏻 the way you respond in poetry feels like a continuation of the space itself ✨